tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-188490281217241971.post7460820433610939346..comments2023-10-14T10:56:43.661-07:00Comments on Roger Eschbacher Books and Other Writing: Guest Blogger Scott Bury Talks EditingRoger Eschbacherhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03588775352918614245noreply@blogger.comBlogger5125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-188490281217241971.post-46400552401741480522011-12-26T12:31:19.988-08:002011-12-26T12:31:19.988-08:00Yep I agree, it's good to use more powerful wo...Yep I agree, it's good to use more powerful words to carry the same meaning yet shortening one's sentences.Michael Offutt, Phantom Readerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10557969104886174930noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-188490281217241971.post-67891047293822768002011-12-25T20:58:31.533-08:002011-12-25T20:58:31.533-08:00This comment has been removed by the author.The Blogger Girlzhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16915385689799889397noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-188490281217241971.post-9420201391165811382011-12-25T20:57:42.058-08:002011-12-25T20:57:42.058-08:00Very nice, the sentence comparisons were very help...Very nice, the sentence comparisons were very helpful.<br /><br />Merry Chirstmas!The Blogger Girlzhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16915385689799889397noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-188490281217241971.post-52144918939706756042011-12-20T04:35:40.713-08:002011-12-20T04:35:40.713-08:00Beg to differ ;o) IMHO, your rewrites do lean thin...Beg to differ ;o) IMHO, your rewrites do lean things up - they also lose some of the richness of the story, and - which is worse - lose some of the story itself. Assuming there is a point in informing us that it is not ALL the nuns that are trying to explain away the dragon, and that there is something pathetic (or otherwise odd) about the attempt, I would (re)write it like this :<br /><br />The older nuns were attempting to banish the dragons with words - they claimed it was merely an illusion created by the Devil.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-188490281217241971.post-91039147081806143362011-12-15T08:21:24.519-08:002011-12-15T08:21:24.519-08:00Great interview! Editing is hard for me. I love wh...Great interview! Editing is hard for me. I love what I write, but I have to remember that getting rid of it only makes my novel better. It was great to read your proccess Scott, thanks for sharing!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com